Really nice!
You have a really nice song here.
The only complaint I would have is the choirs that come in. They sound very gutteral (<-word that came up in head). Not very clear choirs.
But otherwise, a great song! I want to hear the rest.
~Phyrnna ^_^
I think I know exactly what you're talkin about. I didn't really put too much effort into mixing yet. The reverb setting I have on it is probably a bit too much for it (the choir that is). It is sure to be fixed by the time the cd actually comes out. Maybe I'll be able to get rid of that "gutterish" sound by then, lol.
-Jason
KTRECORDS
Hahahah. That happened to me too!
That final thing.. yep. So happened to me. I believe Twins of Duality was done right before my Calc final. O_O; Stayed up so late that night... good thing the final wasn't until the middle of the day so that I could sleep.
Anyways, onto the song...
This song is certainly filling with creativity! The lead melody is very good as previously stated below. The only thing that I can think of improving is the mastering on it. Otherwise it sounds great. Notably the piano needs to sound more... real? xD
Great job! :D And good to see you are still around and kicking. xD
~Phyrnna ^_^
Thank you :D Haha yeah I don't have the ear for mastering yet, gotta work on that.
and I'll use a better piano next time =P this one's from the default FL Studio library XD
Whoa....
That piano needs to be changed.... >_< It's a bad sounding piano.
Maybe I can help you out with that.
The bass itself also needs some mixing... right now it borderline clips.
Yeah... overall this does need some mixing help. Especially at 1:36 where it really clips.
That and your synths need to be a bit smoother.
~Phyrnna ^_^
Finally someone tries to help lol. Yah I know the synth that comes in during the first main part, I have been messing around with for awhile and cant get it to sound smooth so I might change it all together. But yah I know it needs a new piano for sure lol. You know of one?
But thanks for the review, cause getting good reviews right now is something I actually dont want. I need all the help I can get :p
-LR-
Nice strings.
One thing that I'll say is that your strings sound really nice. Whatever you're doing there with the strings, good job!
This has a very ambient feel to it, and it works as a backdrop song for a scene or something.
As the previous reviewer had stated before me, the melody isn't very prominent. Although when it starts building up near 1:50, it's really well done. The sound is also very professional and sounds great.
Great job on this song!
5/5
~Phyrnna ^_^
I didn't exactly have a melody in mind when I made this one it was just me messing around on the keyboard. Found the Attack to velocity parameter and messed with it, really useful setting.
The strings are just the basic Logic Pro strings with decent reverb and compression on them.
Really great!
One of them songs by you that's absolutely great! Love the new style.
The intro is definitely the hooking point! :D Great intro and it works really well.
I like how the "circus" lead doesn't sound so circusy now and sounds great!
:D
2:33-2:45 = EARGASM! :D
Great job!!!
5/5
10/10
~Phyrnna ^_^
Thanks!!!
Glad you found the intro to work :P
EARGASM + ORGASM ;]
Thanks again for the review and support Mel! :D
Fits the name!
I can certainly imagine the title in the song. Flying about in a space journey. Although I think what could improve it is if you had a quiet "ambient" section where it's ambient pads + the piano playing the melody that you had it playing.
Great song nonetheless! :D
~Phyrnna ^_^
Thanks Mel :D I've actually remade a part of the song, and used the idea you wrote :D and it sounds very mellow and sweet ^^ So thanks for the idea aswell ^^
But then there's the problem with me and finishing songs xD so I guess it'll take a while before I re-open the project.
Anyhow, thanks alot for the review, and for the "8" and for the idea. And ofc, thanks for the support Mel, it means alot ^^
Cheers
Good good good!
I can certainly dance to this song! Although there are a few points of improvement needed.
The intro to 0:13 is really well done. After that point though, the bass needs a little toning down. There is a constant low frequency vibration that detracts from the song big time. I'd suggest a high pass on the EQ on frequencies to cut out the frequencies under C1. The bass vibration really overpowers the rest of the song, and it only gets worse when I listen to it on my speakers+subwoofer.
The transition part from 0:41 to 1:08 isn't bad... although not a favorite of mine. That panning to-and-fro synth got a little bit annoying.
The part after that from 1:08 to 1:49 is my absolute favorite part of this song. It's a nice compliment to the hard parts that precede and follow after it. The snare entering in at 1:35 is a nice lead in to the following part.
Again, as I had said with the part before, this part has the same vibration bass problem. Although I liked how you included the crystal sounding synth at 2:17.
The ending however is a problem. It's so abrupt... and I seriously think you could do much better than just a drum breakdown to synth chord.
Great job nonetheless! Just fix it up a bit and it'll be good!
~Phyrnna ^_^
Thanks for the input!
I'll definitely take your comments into consideration. I'll probably tweak it soon. The ending was actually my least favorite part. I noticed how I ended most, if not all, of my songs with a simple crash, and I wanted to try something different. I'll do some more experimenting.
Again, thanks for the review! I really appreciate it!
First Review! :D
Great song! :D
The piano melody is really nice. The piano sound itself is rather.... yuck. But that's alright since that's going to be replaced by singing. ^_^
The intro to this song makes me think that it's going to be a classical song. But of course I took a look at the genre so I knew it wasn't. I'm wondering... what sounds are you using for the choir? From what I'm hearing, you wiped out the dry volume and used only the wet volume from the reverb. The one thing I have about that choir is that it has a slow attack. You might want to compliment the choir sound with a quicker chorus sound so it sounds better.
The piano that enters in at 0:13 sounds really weird. Sounds a bit too... belly. But if you change that sound a little, I think it could be a good backing to the vocals (if they enter there) or it could just be a good intro.
Again, the choir enters at 1:50. There's a weird synth sound that enters not too long after the choir. It's a little sharp... maybe EQ out some of the high pitches? As for the choir at that point, I think you could use some much more dramatic choirs than the ones you used at the beginning. You probably could still use the same samples, just put different effects on them.
The part after that is plain regular dance music. :P The crowd effect that comes in at 2:41... is annoying. In my opinion at least. I'm not sure what sample pack that's from.... but it's overused. And it doesn't fit very well. Also from 3:12 to 3:25, it sounds like the crowd sounds dip down at the beats. Did you accidentally sidechain it to one of the peak controllers? It sounds weird.
Great song overall, I want to hear the final product! :D
~Phyrnna ^_^
YESS!!! I could always count on you to leave a constructive review!!!
Lol i didnt know ppl didnt like the piano. My brother told me about it but i was like ur crazy u dont know anything but of course he was right....Ill change it up for sure
As for the choir im not understanding. Do u want me to lower the attack or make it higher?
The weird synth it was a gate and i really didnt know if i should keep it or not. I think ill just replace it completely.
For the crowd, i wanted to switch it up a bit cuz it was getting kinda bland. So i added it in cuz first it was in the beginning and because of the bland part.
I actually just automated the volume to decrease so it would fade out.
Anyways i will look into these problems and have the final up l8er. Thanks a lot for the review i really appreciate it!
Great song!
For an ambient piece, this is very well written indeed. :D
It does get a little bit repetitive at times indeed. But I really don't think that it's a problem at all. It works well for this song. I can certainly see this song being used in an animation. Probably being used in a movie in which a protagonist explores underwater ruins. Your title certainly suggests that.
Great song! And great to know you're not dead. :P
~Phyrnna ^_^
hehe that would be fantastic eh ? hahaha Could you imagine hearing this on the big screen hhaaha
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