Nice strings.
One thing that I'll say is that your strings sound really nice. Whatever you're doing there with the strings, good job!
This has a very ambient feel to it, and it works as a backdrop song for a scene or something.
As the previous reviewer had stated before me, the melody isn't very prominent. Although when it starts building up near 1:50, it's really well done. The sound is also very professional and sounds great.
Great job on this song!
5/5
~Phyrnna ^_^
I didn't exactly have a melody in mind when I made this one it was just me messing around on the keyboard. Found the Attack to velocity parameter and messed with it, really useful setting.
The strings are just the basic Logic Pro strings with decent reverb and compression on them.
Really great!
One of them songs by you that's absolutely great! Love the new style.
The intro is definitely the hooking point! :D Great intro and it works really well.
I like how the "circus" lead doesn't sound so circusy now and sounds great!
:D
2:33-2:45 = EARGASM! :D
Great job!!!
5/5
10/10
~Phyrnna ^_^
Thanks!!!
Glad you found the intro to work :P
EARGASM + ORGASM ;]
Thanks again for the review and support Mel! :D
Oooh! Piano menu loop!
I really like this one. Particularly I like the FF X-2 loop (haven't heard the KH2 one) so I was interested in hearing what this one sounded like. It's really nice indeed, certainly something I can see as a menu loop.
You know... this inspires me to try out a song like this.
And as always, you're a great composer for your age.
~Phyrnna ^_^
Nice song.
You certainly have potential here. But there is so much that you can work on.
0:01 - 0:04 I really think you can cut this silence beginning down in half and it'll still work just fine. The intro sound effect works well, although I think panning effects on that would certainly give it a much more impressive sound. At 0:08 when the main theme enters, that sound needs to be mastered a bit.... it sounds low quality. The sounds that join in at 0:13 come in with too much reverb... which can be cut down on. The background string that joins in at 0:18 needs an EQ touch up, and a high pass to cut out noise from the sample.
Now with all this orchestral... the one thing that got to me is that it's very cramped. The sounds are all deadpanned in the centered. And the reason I say deadpanned is that it sounds like it's coming out of one speaker in front of me instead of being in a live orchestra. Sounds fine out of my subwoofer speaker set, but not so much when I put on my monitoring headset. I would suggest use of the stereo separation function and panning function. Pan instruments off to the side as they would be in a real orchestra. It really gives that live orchestra feel.
The percussion is nice, and works well, especially in the part from 0:20 to 0:46. However I would note that you need to adjust levels and EQ. The high frequency percussives are too subdued and are being overcome and your bass percussives (drums) are solely bass and needs an EQ boost in the higher frequencies.
The part that starts at 0:47 isn't bad. Although I think that sound effect you have repeating in the background alongside the percussion, can certainly use a stereo separation and a panning effect. When your harmonizing strings come back in... there's a problem. I don't know what you know about music theory... but you have a very small range with those strings as I can hear at 1:33 when they come in by themselves. You really need to vertically expand on that.
The guitar that comes in at 1:45 needs to panned in, and not put so close to the listener. It's a little too close and makes it sound odd and out of place. 2:20 is nice when it first comes in, but having it repeat so many times is a bit much. The rock guitars that repeat that phrase are far from convincing too. They sound very.... recorded and unmastered. At 3:13, when you have that theme coming back in yet again, same criticism that I passed from before. This part should be the pinnacle of your song and I think mastering and mixing work here will dramatically improve the song.
Well, that was all about sound. But as far as compositional merit... there is a far way for this to go. It's much too repetitive. The theme that you have emphasized is great, but it's overly repeated and a done a little too much. If you want to make it that long, you need more parts to it. More variation. Otherwise it's overstaying its welcome by being any longer than a minute and a half.
Great song still, and I can hear potential indeed.
~Phyrnna ^_^
Really wonderful track.
It's actually rather nice to see you doing a track outside of the dance genre! And you do a mighty good job at it.
The piano in the beginning of this track is really well done. The ambient strings that come in are introduced nicely... although they're slightly unconvincing. You could make it a little more realistic. The choir that comes in later works well, and actually sounds good.
Overall a really good track... not a lot to complain about here.
~Phyrnna ^_^
Fits the name!
I can certainly imagine the title in the song. Flying about in a space journey. Although I think what could improve it is if you had a quiet "ambient" section where it's ambient pads + the piano playing the melody that you had it playing.
Great song nonetheless! :D
~Phyrnna ^_^
Thanks Mel :D I've actually remade a part of the song, and used the idea you wrote :D and it sounds very mellow and sweet ^^ So thanks for the idea aswell ^^
But then there's the problem with me and finishing songs xD so I guess it'll take a while before I re-open the project.
Anyhow, thanks alot for the review, and for the "8" and for the idea. And ofc, thanks for the support Mel, it means alot ^^
Cheers
Great song! :D
This is a nice remix of the song! :D Although I have some criticisms about it. :P
In the introduction of the song, the piano chords could be changed a bit. You should probably add a bass chord an octave or two below the chords that you have, giving it more of a bassy feel.
At 0:22, the kick that cuts off the piano and starts off the vocals... I think there's a little too much reverb and bass on it. There's a lot of residual low frequencies vibrating left over after that kick hits. It happens very apparently again at 3:23. It seems to also be a problem when the kick returns again at 1:07. The low frequencies of the kick are amplified by the reverb and it ends up creating a constant low frequency vibrating in the back of the song. I can hear it on the headphones, and I can REALLY hear it on my subwoofers. I would suggest on the EQ for the kicks, stick a high pass on at the lowest possible frequency. That way you can get as much bass as possible, and cut out all the annoying super-low-frequency vibrations.
I'm not sure what effect you added onto the original vocals, but my friend who was listening at the same time I did commented that it sounded robotic. Now I've heard the original samples, so I understand the reverb... but did you stick a flanger on top of that? I think when you first have the lyrics, you shouldn't have that effect and just have the bare vocals. And then when all the synths come in and the vocals come back in 1:29, it's fine to have that effect since now the synths cover for it.
I like the use of the snare machine gun at 0:59, no complaints about it.
At 1:19, the snare that you have come in is a little.... iffy. It's probably the sample that you used... but it cuts out too fast. I would have increased the release time on that. If you can do that, do that and increase it by maybe four steps. If not... increase the delay time. It would make it sound smoother and not like the snares got sidechained.
At 1:53, I like the contrast break into piano. Now you know I'll comment on the piano :P. The piano is nice, but it sounds a little crystally. I'm not sure what sample you're using there, but I would lower the muffle or increase the hardness a bit (if there are those settings). After that, for added effect, I think lower the dry volume in the reverb a bit and increase the wet volume a little. If the hardness/muffle settings aren't in there (I know FL Keys has them... not sure about other VST's) , then I suppose all you could do is increase the dry volume in the reverb settings and lessen the dampening on the high frequencies in the reverb.
I think one thing with the song is that there is too much bass... it's a little overcoming. I did comment on how to fix it on the kick... but maybe you might want to try doing that to the master (the whole song).
The rest of the song, I don't have any complaints about, it's a great song overall! That and compositionally-wise, it's not bad. :D Just some sound problems here and there. :P
Keep it up!
~Phyrnna ^_^
Good good good!
I can certainly dance to this song! Although there are a few points of improvement needed.
The intro to 0:13 is really well done. After that point though, the bass needs a little toning down. There is a constant low frequency vibration that detracts from the song big time. I'd suggest a high pass on the EQ on frequencies to cut out the frequencies under C1. The bass vibration really overpowers the rest of the song, and it only gets worse when I listen to it on my speakers+subwoofer.
The transition part from 0:41 to 1:08 isn't bad... although not a favorite of mine. That panning to-and-fro synth got a little bit annoying.
The part after that from 1:08 to 1:49 is my absolute favorite part of this song. It's a nice compliment to the hard parts that precede and follow after it. The snare entering in at 1:35 is a nice lead in to the following part.
Again, as I had said with the part before, this part has the same vibration bass problem. Although I liked how you included the crystal sounding synth at 2:17.
The ending however is a problem. It's so abrupt... and I seriously think you could do much better than just a drum breakdown to synth chord.
Great job nonetheless! Just fix it up a bit and it'll be good!
~Phyrnna ^_^
Thanks for the input!
I'll definitely take your comments into consideration. I'll probably tweak it soon. The ending was actually my least favorite part. I noticed how I ended most, if not all, of my songs with a simple crash, and I wanted to try something different. I'll do some more experimenting.
Again, thanks for the review! I really appreciate it!
First Review! :D
Great song! :D
The piano melody is really nice. The piano sound itself is rather.... yuck. But that's alright since that's going to be replaced by singing. ^_^
The intro to this song makes me think that it's going to be a classical song. But of course I took a look at the genre so I knew it wasn't. I'm wondering... what sounds are you using for the choir? From what I'm hearing, you wiped out the dry volume and used only the wet volume from the reverb. The one thing I have about that choir is that it has a slow attack. You might want to compliment the choir sound with a quicker chorus sound so it sounds better.
The piano that enters in at 0:13 sounds really weird. Sounds a bit too... belly. But if you change that sound a little, I think it could be a good backing to the vocals (if they enter there) or it could just be a good intro.
Again, the choir enters at 1:50. There's a weird synth sound that enters not too long after the choir. It's a little sharp... maybe EQ out some of the high pitches? As for the choir at that point, I think you could use some much more dramatic choirs than the ones you used at the beginning. You probably could still use the same samples, just put different effects on them.
The part after that is plain regular dance music. :P The crowd effect that comes in at 2:41... is annoying. In my opinion at least. I'm not sure what sample pack that's from.... but it's overused. And it doesn't fit very well. Also from 3:12 to 3:25, it sounds like the crowd sounds dip down at the beats. Did you accidentally sidechain it to one of the peak controllers? It sounds weird.
Great song overall, I want to hear the final product! :D
~Phyrnna ^_^
YESS!!! I could always count on you to leave a constructive review!!!
Lol i didnt know ppl didnt like the piano. My brother told me about it but i was like ur crazy u dont know anything but of course he was right....Ill change it up for sure
As for the choir im not understanding. Do u want me to lower the attack or make it higher?
The weird synth it was a gate and i really didnt know if i should keep it or not. I think ill just replace it completely.
For the crowd, i wanted to switch it up a bit cuz it was getting kinda bland. So i added it in cuz first it was in the beginning and because of the bland part.
I actually just automated the volume to decrease so it would fade out.
Anyways i will look into these problems and have the final up l8er. Thanks a lot for the review i really appreciate it!
This song is amazing.... O_O
The orchestration is very well done, and the melody is very touching. It's also very well mastered. I'm surprised this hasn't been well recognized yet.
Great job on this song! I'm certainly going to check out your other songs.
~Phyrnna ^_^
What's my motto? Turning Dreams into Reality. That's my motto.
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Joined on 3/20/08
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